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This photo did not pass the screening. I would like to know how to improve it.
In the morning, the sun was rising in a backlit manner, and the plants reflecting the light were beautiful.
Noise was processed with pureraw4 and brightness and contrast were adjusted with photoshop and nik collection.
I wanted to express the morning atmosphere, so I consciously adjusted the brightness of the highlights and plants while retaining shadow detail.
I would like to know more about overall brightness and contrast.
α7RIV
24mm
SS1/20
F11
ISO100
Hello Hiroyoshi
Thank you for sharing your marshland photo with us. I do like the light on the land, bringing out the textures of the vegetation and the details of the flowers. I am posting an edit where I have tried to open up the shadows a little on the hill slopes in the distance. I also think, however, that it might be worth cropping the left side of the image as the path is on the extreme right and it leads our eyes to that side of the frame; additionally, the sky on the left side is very pale and not as interesting as the right side. The decisions are always yours in the end, of course.
Good light, Elizabeth
Hiroyoshi Kushino,
Thank you for posting 'Glistening Marshland' to Critique Forum. Thanks also for writing about the photo, telling us what attracted you to the scene and the editing you did to express that.
Elizabeth has written about the composition pulling our attention to the right side of the frame and away from the beautiful light on the marsh. A suggestion we often make here is to flip an image left-to-right, and also view it upside down. Painters do this with their canvas by looking at it in a mirror or turning the canvas upside down. It helps the artist judge the weight, balance, and flow of the elements in the composition as they observe which part of the image first draws their attention. Flipping is a good exercise - even if you return to the original orientation, it can be a lesson in how composition works.
My suggestions are to lighten the shadows a little, flip the frame left-to-right, and lighten the marsh with Photoshop's Dodge tool set to 'Highlights'. This is to draw viewers' attention to the marsh which is the subject of the photo. The red flowers were selected with 'Select>Color Range' so their colour could be made stronger with 'Image>Adjustments>Hue/Saturation'.
The flip may not work for you. It's said that in many parts of the world we 'read' a photo just like we do text - from left to right. It may be different in Japan.
Thanks again for sharing the photo. The early morning feeling is refreshing. As photographers it's the 'good light' that we're after.
. . . . . Steven, senior critic
This photo did not pass the screening. I would like to know how to improve it.
In the morning, the sun was rising in a backlit manner, and the plants reflecting the light were beautiful.
Noise was processed with pureraw4 and brightness and contrast were adjusted with photoshop and nik collection.
I wanted to express the morning atmosphere, so I consciously adjusted the brightness of the highlights and plants while retaining shadow detail.
I would like to know more about overall brightness and contrast.
α7RIV
24mm
SS1/20
F11
ISO100
Hello Hiroyoshi Kushino,
Thank you for sharing this lovely photo of this marshland with us.
My friends Elizabeth and Steve have given you some excellent suggestions.
Here is what I would suggest. I imported your image in Nik Color Efex pro and used the Detail Enhance, Polarization and Brilliance/Saturation filters. With the Brilliance filter I made the image a little warmer. The polarization help reduce the bright part of the sky.
Then I used Dehaze in Photoshop to help reduce a little more with the bright part of the sky. Then I used the Burn too to darken a little the cloud that was on the left, which is now on the right because like Steven suggested, I flipped the image and I think it makes the image flow better.
The results are not very different then Steven's but perhaps they will give you another idea about what can be done with your image.
I hope these suggestions are helpful to you.
Lucie, senior critic
